Well executed plot, could use more intensity

Review written by: [get_author]

Published on: Friday, August 12, 2022 @ 10:57:52 am

Plot Review:

The plot is great. Really like the development, shows a real pro con-man at work.

Character Development:

The characters are concisely defined and I get a real feel for who they are.


The mall area is fine but maybe add a few more unique aspects to make it seem more real.

Grammar, punctuation, etc.:

I didn't see any issues with the technical portions of the story.


Could use more differences between the way each character talks. They all sound similar. Also, could use more confrontation in their speaking.

Other comments:

Good story, well developed. Add more intensity on your next draft.

Overall view of story:

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